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‘Twere’nt long ago, when I started tumbling. Hot dry winds rose around me and the base of my stalk went snap and I began to roll. Finally free of my roots, ready to roam the deserts and plains. Catch a glimpse of the tall orange buttes in the northern plains, as they had been described to me by other holy rollers.

Maybe even catch a view of people. Heard lotsa  stories ‘bout them people, even though I saw one on a horse when I were but a sprout. People were always in’eresting, usin’ us for shootin’ practice, something to kick, something innocuous and ubiquitous to say, “Yeah. You’re alone out here. Just you, the sun, and the tumbleweed.”

Starting tumbling, started seein’ some strange things. There ain’t hardly no trees ‘round here, but there’s lots of wood, rectangular like, half formed into boxes. I heard that people had something to do with it, wanting the sparkles from the ground my detached roots once sunk into. sometimes I tumbled through whole canyons of these structures, not half as majestic as the buttes to my north and the mountains far distant. Piddly kinda valley, I reckon.

I rolled through one of the piddly people valleys, bullet strikes changing my course. A few branches here, a few branches there, no matter, keep on rollin’ to see that two people figures were running off towards the buttes, two beautiful orange striped barrels rising to the sky. A crunch as a horse’s hoof lands on me and I am kicked up in poof of dust.

“We’ll head them off at the pass, the bastards. Ya!”

“Ya!”

And the horses reared and galloped off, hooves propelling me forward and over and over. I hear gunshots in the distance. I have no duel with the men or the horses, my duel is with the dry dirt and sky, as my branches slowly break down and I am faster, lighter.  I’ve met some nice gusts of dust in my travels. Mebbe I’ll be a dust storm next. Yeah, that’ll be nice.

Whoosh.
Silly little story about a tumbleweed. 

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Holy cow! Thank you so much to everybody who came through and read and enjoyed. Being selected for a Daily Deviation really warms my heart and I am glad that I logged on in the middle of a busy semester to find this validating information. 
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-09-06
Tumbler by ~Tsuuretsu2Unabara Suggester Writes: The strong voice of this piece's unusual narrator really makes it stand out. An intriguing perspective with a great understanding of voice. ( Suggested by Atheshya and Featured by BeccaJS )
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SomeLily12 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

That was completly....AWESOME! :D keep maing more ;)

 

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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thanks, I plan to.
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LightningIdle Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
That was great. :la:
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you. 
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TwentyfootAngels Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh... I like this. You may not have heard of it, but I read the whole thing in the voice of The Narrator from Bastion.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you.

I haven't heard of Bastion, but I will check it out. 
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red-wynter Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Student General Artist
I keep mentally correcting there's no "e" in Tumblr... Curses!

I love the visual a lot. And it's interesting to read about the pov of a very unexpected character.
Congrats on the DD!
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Haha, I believe another person commented with the same issue. 

Thank you, I try to be unexpected. 
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Frithsdotter Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
The voice matches the nature of a tumbleweed. Passive, not bored exactly, but pliant.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you! I'm glad that the voice came across well.
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
Well that was fantastic.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Well thanks.
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
I actually think I'll read this to my future kids. I really want this story to be a part of their childhood. I want them to remember horses and desert and tumbleweeds and beautiful prose from their early years.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
I think you'll be a great parent. 
Maybe over winter break I'll illustrate Tumbler so there will be images accompanying the words.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you. I'm really thrilled and it has brightened up my semester.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, glad to know that :happybounce:
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The-Night-Dreamer Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
This is just brilliant!
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Thank you!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
Cute.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thankies.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome.
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AmeliaPrime Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"TUMBLR. THERE IS NO E."

I said that and then read the description/ it and I felt like an ass but still sort of still in awe of what I just read. I hardly ever read stories on here because I'm not a writer so I don't know how to offer quality feedback which is what I'm all about, but that is seriously really good. I really love the wording and how it sets the western mood, which I don't think I've ever seen done well.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Haha! I actually considered leaving out the "e" but thought that might be overly referential and anachronistic.

Thank you. And don't be scared not to be a reader just because you aren't a writer.
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AmeliaPrime Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree there. I think the title is like this glittery and overly extravagant bow on the present that just makes everything ten times better that also serves as a guilty pleasure
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
I concur. Sometimes you need the title to understand the piece and sometimes you need to read the entire piece before you understand the title.
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OakAndAcorn Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
One of the more creative and entertaining tales I've read on this website. Well paced, full of character. Nice. :clap:
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thank you. That means a lot to me. :bow:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I definitely didn't expect to read a story narrated by a tumbleweed when I woke up today - and it's a good one, too! This plant's got a pretty strong voice which fits the genre quite nicely. This toes an interesting line between humor and character study, and it's kind of great.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thank you! I didn't expect to write a story narrated by a tumbleweed, truth be told.
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Who really does?
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you for suggesting this story as a DD. 
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm quite glad you ended up getting it!
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Clockchat Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
It takes a very imaginative mind to think of giving a tumbleweed a protagonist's role, and talent to pull it off successfully. It was quite a charming read, and our rootsy fella had a swell personality. Liked the western attitude to it, natural because of its usual environment, and how little it thinks of human's accomplishments, such as boxes or houses. Who can blame it, if we compete our achievements to those of mother nature? This gives the piece a very fresh point of view, from an outsider to our whole species, but who was human enough to make me smile and like this tale to the point of Faving. Good going!
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Thank you. :-) I can only try to communicate how gratifying your comment is to me. I had a real kick trying to figure out how a tumbleweed would know about things and feel about it's surroundings, and I am glad that enjoyment translated through.
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