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‘Twere’nt long ago, when I started tumbling. Hot dry winds rose around me and the base of my stalk went snap and I began to roll. Finally free of my roots, ready to roam the deserts and plains. Catch a glimpse of the tall orange buttes in the northern plains, as they had been described to me by other holy rollers.

Maybe even catch a view of people. Heard lotsa  stories ‘bout them people, even though I saw one on a horse when I were but a sprout. People were always in’eresting, usin’ us for shootin’ practice, something to kick, something innocuous and ubiquitous to say, “Yeah. You’re alone out here. Just you, the sun, and the tumbleweed.”

Starting tumbling, started seein’ some strange things. There ain’t hardly no trees ‘round here, but there’s lots of wood, rectangular like, half formed into boxes. I heard that people had something to do with it, wanting the sparkles from the ground my detached roots once sunk into. sometimes I tumbled through whole canyons of these structures, not half as majestic as the buttes to my north and the mountains far distant. Piddly kinda valley, I reckon.

I rolled through one of the piddly people valleys, bullet strikes changing my course. A few branches here, a few branches there, no matter, keep on rollin’ to see that two people figures were running off towards the buttes, two beautiful orange striped barrels rising to the sky. A crunch as a horse’s hoof lands on me and I am kicked up in poof of dust.

“We’ll head them off at the pass, the bastards. Ya!”

“Ya!”

And the horses reared and galloped off, hooves propelling me forward and over and over. I hear gunshots in the distance. I have no duel with the men or the horses, my duel is with the dry dirt and sky, as my branches slowly break down and I am faster, lighter.  I’ve met some nice gusts of dust in my travels. Mebbe I’ll be a dust storm next. Yeah, that’ll be nice.

Whoosh.
Silly little story about a tumbleweed. 

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Holy cow! Thank you so much to everybody who came through and read and enjoyed. Being selected for a Daily Deviation really warms my heart and I am glad that I logged on in the middle of a busy semester to find this validating information. 
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Given 2013-09-06
Tumbler by ~Tsuuretsu2Unabara Suggester Writes: The strong voice of this piece's unusual narrator really makes it stand out. An intriguing perspective with a great understanding of voice. ( Suggested by Atheshya and Featured by Beccalicious )
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SomeLily12 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

That was completly....AWESOME! :D keep maing more ;)

 

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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thanks, I plan to.
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LightningIdle Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
That was great. :la:
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you. 
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TwentyfootAngels Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh... I like this. You may not have heard of it, but I read the whole thing in the voice of The Narrator from Bastion.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you.

I haven't heard of Bastion, but I will check it out. 
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red-wynter Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Student General Artist
I keep mentally correcting there's no "e" in Tumblr... Curses!

I love the visual a lot. And it's interesting to read about the pov of a very unexpected character.
Congrats on the DD!
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Haha, I believe another person commented with the same issue. 

Thank you, I try to be unexpected. 
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Frithsdotter Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
The voice matches the nature of a tumbleweed. Passive, not bored exactly, but pliant.
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Tsuuretsu2Unabara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Thank you! I'm glad that the voice came across well.
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